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(1) Disgaea: Hour of Darkness

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Chrono1219

Now, do I replay ME3 for this, or do I just use my existing ending file...

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He also said "make plans" so it could mean like an hour away or so. I live in a place where if I traveled 15 minutes I'd have better internet.

As for an MMO

Phantasy Star Online? >.> it's not really active or anything (would have to be blue burst) RO might work, but I havn't tested it)\.

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This is a problem if they are buying food for a family of 20 for half a year.

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Guys, this is Ayuyu who thinks all women should be required to wear dresses/skirts 5 days a week.

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Entry 3

I'm about to complain about something only someone who has a lot of knowledge with RPGs would point out. In MMOs you resurrect at a graveyard, in other RPGs you return to a save point. I guess it could be like demon souls or something like that, but everything in the story from the team name cliche, FF references, etc screams generic JRPG.

I do feel like the entire thing is more or less a very long rant without any real content. 90% of it is vlad complaining about the heroes and how stupid they are, while at the end he just wants to kill things. Also, if he's burning dying flesh, I'm not really sure how that's working out. If they were all dead they'd be sent back to the graveyard.

There is very little wrong I can point out technically, but I just found it kind of boring and one dimensional. If I didn't have experience with RPGs this story would be completely lost on me. I'd consider that a little too niche an audience.


Entry 4 is going to take me a while to get the write up for, so It'll be up tomorrow.

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Okay... i guess I should stop being lazy

Entry 1

The most obvious problem is the continuity error with the sun. It's probably the one you mentioned in your earlier post. Next I'd say to avoid redundancy. For example, you already told us he stopped at his apartment, there is no reason to tell us he's no longer moving inhumanly fast. And.. "His speed increased, faster and faster, as seconds..." can be changed/shored to "Time passed at an increasingly accelerated rate" or something similar.

"I smiled. Today was almost perfect. Everything is going according to plan. Now if only it wasn’t a cloudy day." The last sentence seems like a complete mood swap. At first he feels like it's almost the best day ever, then he's complaining.

Now, the narrator keeps talking about his "plans" and how things are important or not important to them. The thing is, I don't know what his plans are. There is an obvious time travel type thing, but it's not even clear how that's really happening either. At times I'm led to believe it's really happening, and sometimes I think it's all in his head because I read it as the narrator being somewhat of a psychopath.

A major issue is your constantly changing tenses. A tip is to use third person (almost every fiction writing instructor I've had has recommended this. TBH I'm not I'm not exactly sure why, but it seems easier to get a good flow and stay within your tense restrictions while using it. If you're wondering why all my entries are in first person, that's because I have a lot of experience with screen writing.)

An issue I personally had was the narrators little "inputs" that were jotted throughout. They just seem tacked on and don't add anything.

This could have been interesting in a Minority Report type way, but nothing is clearly laid out for the reader, I'm not even sure if the narrator is a good or bad guy.

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Hall of Fame

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dont you have to use it every time or something? what happens if you lose it

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Most of the time it takes a while for full zombism to set in. Long enough for a cure to be administered if one exists.

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I can just imagine the heads of CBS sitting in an enclosed room thinking this up.

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Yes

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That was so bad the story crashes my browser

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You friended yourself with 2 facebook alts?

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Yes

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

What annoyed me the most is how they never (at least as far as I remember) explained why no one wears pants or why they have animal ears/tails

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

From: firefdr | #006
Isn't that the name of that big ass table/computer?
It is and that's ancient

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

OM NOM NOM NOM NOM
notallcaps

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

2.5
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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

up

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

Lot's of shows were on break this week, and a couple will be finishing up next week. Pretty good week overall, lots of good episodes.

Week 11 Ranking
(#)=Episode Ranking
(x)=No episode this week/missed the cut (subbed before monday)
(*)=Complete

Favorites
1 (7). Haiyore! Nyaruko-san
2 (*). Is this a Zombie? of the Dead
3 (x). Acchi Kocchi

Priority
4 (1). Dusk Maiden of Amnesia
5 (2). Hyouka
6 (6). Space Bros
7 (5). Tsuritama
8 (x). The Knight in the Area

Great
9 (3). Kids on the Slope
10 (11). Hunter x Hunter (2011)
11 (9). Kuroko no Basket

Good
12 (4). Fate/Zero 2nd Season
13 (13). Medaka Box

Average
14 (14). Sengoku Collection
15 (8). Mysterious Girlfriend X
16 (10). AKB0048
17 (12). Jormungand
18 (x). Eureka Seven AO

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

Boscopinions

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

Spork has like the complete collection or something >.>

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

From: Iamdead7 | #002
That is simultaneously the best and worst idea ever

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

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0.5 because it looks kinda badass

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

Batman: TAS is a much better show than Justice League. Actually, Batman Beyond is a better show than Justice League, but it also aired smack in the middle of both decades and it's hard to really place it on a list. I can't call Disney shell outs like Tale Spin/Chip and Dale as good a Tiny Toons either. IMO they don't even really feel like a 90s toon.

If you're wondering the shows I cut from teh 90s list are: Eek The Cat, Darkwing Duck, X-Men, Pepper Ann, and Bobby's World.

From the 00s I cut Rocket Power, Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles, Camp Lazlo, Sponge Bob, and Megas XLR.

Yes the 90s had a lot more original content with daily new episodes, and fast season turnovers, but those days are over. But I'd say the big things are the emergence of Pokemon and the anime wave at the end of the 90s early 00s which pretty much started to fill in more and more slots.

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

Because it's a lot easier to do. You really have to be a complete jerk to collette to not get her.

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

Must be the talk about his new kid

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

OMG

I forgot about the Power Puff Girls

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

Silent Hill 2 is a horror game classic

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

I just checked and the show is a couple of episodes longer than I thought it was, so the next episode is actually pretty good.

The problem with the show isint that any individual episode is bad, but the fact that each episode basically adds a new plot hole. To get an idea how fast it moves, they basically cover 3 complete arcs in the 12 episodes.

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

Ganta has the most annoying dub voice in existence

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

Kelly Kapowski

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

This topic is like what's wrong with board8

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

bump

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

I read that as "A real man pleases her with his mouth"

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

From: GTM | #753
should go in the google word doc, imo
...you can like Look it up on Bulbapedia >.>

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

Yeah... Little Caesars is not good... but it looks better than this.

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

Doesn't Facebook have a app or something for it?

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

Out of curiosity I looked at cartoons from the 90s, 00s, and come uo with...

90s
1. Animaniacs
2. Tiny Toon Adventures
3. Doug
4. Batman: The Animated Series
5. Rocko's Modern Life
6. Kablam
7. Recess
8. ReBoot
9. Pinky and the Brain
10. Hey Arnold

00s
1. Avatar: The Last Airbender
2. Foster's Home for Imaginary Friends
3. Kim Possible
4. Invader Zim
5. Teen Titans
6. Codename: Kids Next Door
7. The Weekenders
8. Total Drama Island
9. The Fairly Odd Parents
10. The Grim Adventures of Billy and Mandy

And then I ask myself which set would I rather watch, and it's pretty hard to choose.

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

From: LeonhartFour | #002
Omitting the ones I haven't played:

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

From: Weakupedia | #003
what

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

Relevant = When Ulti posts in the topic

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

The problem I have with Asami is that she's like a 100% angst driven character.

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

Spiderrat

*shudders*

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

gamefaqs

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

Why are you guys removing Jigglypuff. She's probably the most unique character in terms of play style.

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

Milky Holmes

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

Yes

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.

Toon Link
Wolf
Lucas

the first 2 were easy. The last slot was Lucario or Lucas, but Lucario is cooler

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The beautiful genius who graduated from Harvard as a child and has an IQ of 1.3^googolplex.