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| Topic | Any critiques of this steam store page? |
| Sahuagin 05/24/20 12:46:33 AM #7: | There are minor issues with the writing, but I feel like I'm being super nitpicky by pointing them out. (and I'm not necessarily right) "Biologger was developed with speedrunning in mind, how fast can you beat the game?" is a run-on sentence. "Over 5" sounds weird since it's a small number "Speedrunner friendly, plan your route and try to get the best time!" is a run-on sentence (or something else) If the fifth bullet point has an exclamation mark, then the other ones should end in periods (maybe... not 100% sure) (sounds like if each line is a sentence they should get periods; but since this is marketing material appearance might matter more than punctuation) "...here's a sneak peak of some of the features that will be available upon release!" should maybe end in a colon. --- ... Copied to Clipboard! |
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