Chrono
Wow I did not like either of the first verses. Second verses were a definite improvement. Even though some of Carl's rhymes felt... basic (hill, kill, will, mill), swordsman kept losing me and busting up the flow with his rhyme scheme. I was expecting AA BB CC, but it often went AA BBB CCC instead which is a bit jarring. I'd have liked it more if they were separated by lines so I'd know when to expect rhyme and when to not without being thrown off and forced to backtrack and reread. Anyway... Chrono.
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