Fair enough. I still disagree on exorbitant, but that's neither here nor there.
yes. well i'm just glad you respectfully took the time to read and consider my suggestions.
_Goggalor_ posted...
On the whole though, give me your general consensus on the writing itself if you would be so kind.
once the clarity and structure of it is re-examined a bit, there is absolutely nothing wrong with the writing itself. the framing of the narrative is great, with the biased and probably unreliable narrator pleading his case to the intended listener being the vehicle for relaying the events. it's a great technique for controlling the dissemination of information to the reader and, as you already mentioned, for building up a particular kind of style that is reflective of the narrator's voice. i just used the technique similarly in my entry for the creative writing prompt thread in an effort to evoke a sense of nostalgia, wonderment and ex-post-facto reflection on childhood innocence and naivet.
Nice, thank you. I realize I'm a bit stubborn and I'd do well to take constructive criticism more readily. I suppose that's just out of love for the stories I try to tell. As you said, it's easy to be blinded by those things when you yourself penned the narrative and are attached to it. And nice, I'll have to go and read your story. I wrote this one in that style because I love Poe specifically, and I wanted to do a sort of "Tell tale heart" style book set in the 1920's. ---
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