Genesis Saga, your write up
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1a7dP0PsjObQixT3L61xQM5ObNxpWDS8Ui0Gbn6Esg2k/edit
Added: I honestly got kinda bored of editing near the end which is why there isin't any. I don't know if this was intentional, but there is some clear PoV when you switch from character to character (which is common in a lot of novels), so good job with that. I'm not fully convinced with Espernanza's transformation, it seems too sudden as her reaction and thought process showed no signs of changing throughout the entire story.
You do a good job with character background and fleshing them out, but both lars and the villain seem a little typical of their character types.
Pretty good job overall.
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Chrono1219