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| Topic | Epstein guard willing to spill the beans on Epstein death, offers to cooperate |
| Romes187 11/21/19 2:50:50 PM #18 | the plot thickkkkkkkkkkens |
| Topic | CE, i need some new podcasts to listen to |
| Romes187 11/20/19 6:17:02 PM #3 | The Portal - Eric Weinstein |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/20/19 4:24:39 PM #172 | There are two buzz moments I've found when writing (I have an extremely addictive personality so I always try to find productive buzzes hah)
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| Topic | Landlords literally think this way |
| Romes187 11/20/19 4:02:57 PM #49 | eat the rich |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/20/19 11:23:38 AM #169 | still thinking this through but it might be the magic system in my comedic steampunk epic ill never write |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/20/19 11:22:55 AM #168 | nice man, research and thought like that will show in the writing. i had an idea about a new magic system which i think lends itself to pretty interesting conflict the magic you use depends on the type of alcohol you drink (there can be some hand wavy explanation as to how the alcohol mixes and yada yada). and the strength of magic depends on how much is in your system so most people would die of alcohol poisoning if they over did it...so there's an auto nerf built in but some people don't get drunk or whatever and can be super powerful |
| Topic | wtf is this conservative political cartoon |
| Romes187 11/19/19 6:42:48 PM #23 | this is a tricky one i think its trump went to take some cookies it shined a light on everyone else taking cookies and they all blame him...maybe? not sure what the tap tap tap is makes me want some milk and cookies tbh |
| Topic | why arent you playing pokemon sword/shield? |
| Romes187 11/19/19 6:34:14 PM #34 | im too old and am married with children can't play pokemon |
| Topic | LOL. Disney+ already HACKED |
| Romes187 11/19/19 6:33:36 PM #24 | yeah thats a bullshit topic right here |
| Topic | "Stay hourly. Never go salary or they will abuse the fuck out of you" |
| Romes187 11/19/19 3:27:40 PM #15 | pogo_rabid posted... Salary is the best |
| Topic | Sex trafficking 'epidemic' in East Tennessee fueled by drug addiction |
| Romes187 11/18/19 5:34:09 PM #7 | Irony posted... Abortion is still legal Dang it I wanted to hate something for not liking what I like. What a bummer. |
| Topic | Andrew Yang is a joke candidate |
| Romes187 11/18/19 3:40:17 PM #6 | I wasn't going to vote but instead ill vote Yang The only other candidates with any semblance of a brain are buttigieg and warren but they aren't outside the box thinkers like Yang appears to be (could be wrong, time will tell) |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/18/19 3:12:53 PM #165 | DuranOfForcena posted... seems pretty intriguing, but i think it can stand to be expanded on a bit. you're well under the suggested wordcount range for queries, so you have quite a bit of leeway. in fact, i think if it's too short then agents might get the impression that you haven't put enough thought or detail into it. dunno really, probably depends on the agent, but either way, i would say the personal stakes for the main character and why he gets involved in this adventure could be imparted a bit more clearly. and maybe more detail about what the cult's nefarious plans are, and what might happen if the protagonist doesn't stop them. Thx for feedback. There are a lot of conflicting ideas about how to write a query and I was trying to showcase my writing style. As a thriller, its short, quick paced, and to the point. But motivation should be something to add in. Looking at your protoquery, it is definitely more wordy than mine, but that might be your writing style and its probably good to try and match with the manuscript for obvious reasons. Give them a taste of whats to come. I do also have a synopsis which is gonna be a play by play of the entire story, spoilers and all. I figured the natural progression was query -> if interested, sample chapters --> if still interested, read synopsis to make sure payoff is worth it -> request for full but every agent has their own ways im sure |
| Topic | Jeopardy GOAT tournament this January James Holzhauer, Ken Jennings, Brad Rutter |
| Romes187 11/18/19 2:19:43 PM #7 | imo trebek retires at the end |
| Topic | Jeopardy GOAT tournament this January James Holzhauer, Ken Jennings, Brad Rutter |
| Romes187 11/18/19 2:19:08 PM #6 | |
| Topic | SJW movies keep bombing. Yet Hollywood keeps making them. |
| Romes187 11/18/19 2:16:22 PM #23 | there's a difference between these three
Maybe. I mean you can tell when they are trying too hard |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/17/19 8:38:37 PM #160 | Try Hegel instead of you want a challenge thats a little more ...well not easier but phenomenology Of spirit seems to deal with concepts better explained with what words we have fichte was trying to go beyond Kant one layer which is pretty tough considering its Kant. |
| Topic | Investigation finds widespread discrimination against minority homebuyers on LI |
| Romes187 11/17/19 8:36:39 PM #8 | New York real estate is the worst kind of real estate i literally develop real estate tech for a living and NY is the absolute worst |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/17/19 8:29:15 PM #158 | |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/17/19 8:28:32 PM #157 | The science of knowing is probably a good bet but hes pretty dense and strange and believes the knowledge that hes trying to impart is some actively learned thing you get i havent been able to crack the code but maybe Ill read the translation of lecture notes I have downloaded sometime again. If you can find those Id recommend it since its more of a transcription of what hes trying to teach |
| Topic | Company cuts gay man's salary in half so he will be 'equal to the other girls' |
| Romes187 11/17/19 3:53:05 PM #2 | The gay guy is a sexist piece of shit that doesnt understand the patriarchy take the cut and shut up. A mans voice isnt needed here good on the employer and he should cut every mans wage the same |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/16/19 3:03:23 AM #154 | okay chapter 58...man doing another rewrite after this is going to be tough. I think what I'm gonna do after this first one is do some searches in the document for filter words, weak verbs, etc. and spot check. Then do a read through. If it's where I want, I'll start writing my synopsis. If not, then we'll do another rewrite. |
| Topic | My manager keeps misgendering one of my coworkers |
| Romes187 11/15/19 9:39:37 PM #127 | called my wife a he today she got so offended and I apologized because I have empathy and Im a good person ill never do it again |
| Topic | If you watch Jurassic Park backwards |
| Romes187 11/15/19 8:04:59 PM #11 | If you watch the curious case of Benjamin button backwards its about getting old |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/15/19 6:30:23 PM #153 | something is brewing in me...thinking i have an idea for a new story (But cool enough it can be a prequel to my current one) i have a cool concept, but since I like writing treasure hunts...need a good treasure. This one will take place in africa...here's something i came across that could be fun https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kruger_Millions love that idea haha. some guy claimed in 1947 he found a map to the treasure stitched in a bible. love that stuff. not sure how i tie in my concept though....the timing doesn't quite work. |
| Topic | My manager keeps misgendering one of my coworkers |
| Romes187 11/15/19 6:04:56 PM #110 | im just glad we have protectors of rights where would we be without our rights rights right write rite ? |
| Topic | Like what is Black Pepper actually good for? |
| Romes187 11/15/19 5:50:03 PM #34 | can't beat some fresh pepper on a salad |
| Topic | In your opinion would someone have to be insane to not believe in evolution? |
| Romes187 11/15/19 3:27:07 PM #9 | depends how their model of reality is built a religious substructure underneath everything else would probably cause them to not believe in some aspects of evolution whether that makes them insane is a judgement call I won't make |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/15/19 2:30:46 PM #152 | p-m posted... I haven't been able to write anything in the story I'm working on for about a month now, I got to around 12,000 words and just hit a wall. It's annoying because I know where I want things to go but I've had a real weird writing style throughout and all that's coming to mind is very direct and brief. I don't want it to feel like a story written by multiple people but that's how my mind feels sometimes. For now I'm keeping my mind occupied by trying to write reviews of every comic/manga/novel and film I watch. I would say just keep writing, even if the style or prose sucks and you're just telling. Then you can always go back in revision and fill it out. What is it they say...the first draft is you telling yourself the story. The revision is you telling others the story. |
| Topic | My manager keeps misgendering one of my coworkers |
| Romes187 11/15/19 1:58:17 PM #69 | Yeah or maybe the coworker ends up shooting up the place before killing himself. It'll be blood on your hands if you don't mention something. Definitely agree. Be an ally. |
| Topic | My manager keeps misgendering one of my coworkers |
| Romes187 11/15/19 1:30:46 PM #59 | god i wish i had empathy but since i disagree with posters here, that means i dont fuck im a bad person |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/15/19 1:15:13 PM #150 | Here's my query body so far Dear [name], I am currently seeking representation for my debut novel, OUTBOUND, an adventure thriller of 80,000 words. Ben Lyon (22) is fed up with his job at a call center in Southern California. He decides to quit and dials what he thinks will be his last call, and hears something that will change his life forever: the murder of a stranger. He heads home believing it to be a prank until his roommate convinces him to investigate further. With the help of two treasure hunters and a billionaire financier, the investigation launches them on a globetrotting adventure to locate the tomb of a powerful Emperor. But Bens treacherous past will come back to haunt him, and he will have to learn to overcome his inner demons if he wants to survive the journey. A cult-like group called The Society of Shaman lurk around every corner, determined to find the tomb first, and use its secrets for their own nefarious plans. It's okay but needs tightening up. |
| Topic | My manager keeps misgendering one of my coworkers |
| Romes187 11/15/19 11:21:02 AM #17 | i wish i were brave |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/14/19 3:22:04 PM #148 | coolio i looked over my query and it probably needs a bit of tweaking before i get any feedback trying to focus everything on getting through this rewrite. pretty brutal. last night i stared at the screen for 15 minutes without really doing anything because i just didnt have the energy lmao but i snuck in a few chapters during work early in the day so im not too worried about it I'm still on target to finish this version before December. My daughter is due end of January so maybe I'll start querying around then |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/13/19 4:33:02 PM #144 | Yeah I have a query will post when I get home tonight |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/13/19 4:03:55 PM #141 | Honestly no clue i really want to traditionally publish so I havent done much research into self publishing. i just dont have time to create a cover, write marketing copy, etc etc I want a publisher to pay me to do that haha. I realize its a long shot though, but a guy can dream! |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/13/19 4:00:32 PM #139 | spanky1 posted... So are you going to try traditional publising or self publish, romes? traditional is the goal. If no dice on that I guess I can throw it up on amazon but havent thought that far ahead its one chapter at a time right now. |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/13/19 2:32:25 PM #134 | spanky1 posted... What I've found, I think, is that actual readers of an actual full book are quite patient, and know that novels sometimes take some time to get going. The people who tend to be brutally merciless with their attention spans are the ones reading those endless supplies of chapter 1s over on the many reddit writing subs. I feel like that's a huge thing that sits in their heads when in critique mode. True, and even truer in genre fiction where some setup may be an expectation (fantasy). I think I'm speaking more towards commercial fiction where you need to convince a lit agent (who does read through endless supplies of chapter 1s) to represent you. And also, I guess I'm attempting to write with more broad appeal, knowing I wont satisfy the heavy genre readers, but maybe someone who wants a bubble gum book to read on a plane haha. |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/13/19 1:08:06 PM #130 | DuranOfForcena posted... but is it YA seems a bit too heavy for YA |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/13/19 12:35:09 PM #127 | by the way if you want me to beta/alpha read a chapter, feel free to DM me. |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/13/19 12:34:20 PM #126 | that sounds genre spanning hah |
| Topic | Watching Goofy Movie; Pete legit would be a Trump supporter |
| Romes187 11/13/19 1:31:42 AM #17 | CruelBuffalo posted... Cant ruin the deep and interesting lore of A Goofy Movie worst opinion imo its 2deep4u its a beautiful movie about a father and a son |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/13/19 1:30:00 AM #124 | almost to chapter 50... man I've probably rewritten 90% of my sentences so far. would highly recommend trying it out if anyone here tends to first draft and move on. |
| Topic | DISNEY knocks another one out of the park! Great reception for the Mandalorian ! |
| Romes187 11/12/19 10:47:13 PM #4 | I love Disney but their newer stuff has seriously dropped in quality imo kinda sad but it does well commercially so there ya go |
| Topic | We need to stop acting like Trump and Clinton are the only ones who |
| Romes187 11/12/19 10:01:29 PM #17 | It just shows how stupid people are where the only evil person they can think of is their political opponent main borrrrring |
| Topic | Watching Goofy Movie; Pete legit would be a Trump supporter |
| Romes187 11/12/19 9:52:15 PM #15 | Cant wait for trump to be out of office so we can go back to discussing awesome Disney movies without dragging him into it its tiring |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/12/19 2:55:24 PM #122 | spanky1 posted... Older fantasy novels definitely took longer to get going, but the prose itself doesn't seem different to modern prose to me. it may be a genre thing i really notice it when reading out loud because ill stumble on my words...because there will be an extra "the" or "of" or something like that where new (last 20 years) thrillers seem to have much more economy of words. but yeah pace has improved a lot |
| Topic | Writing topic v2 |
| Romes187 11/12/19 1:56:45 PM #120 | It's pretty crazy how writing style has changed reading book 1 of WoT and when I read, I'm reading out loud to my wife. We've basically stuck to more modern prose which I've gotten used to, but WoT prose trips me up quite a bit. much of that is genre specific (Mostly reading thrillers and fantasy is a tad more wordy) but books seem to get going a lot quicker than WoT did. Not that I didn't enjoy the beginning setup (I'm only on chapter 10 so obviously haven't gotten into anywhere near the meat of a 14 book series haha) |
| Topic | is there any one person who is constantly on your mind right now? |
| Romes187 11/12/19 10:03:04 AM #8 | My daughter with dem feels = dad feels |
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