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LastTomorrow 01/17/23 5:25:10 PM #1:	Basically friends betray her by beating her up, stripping her of her clothes and dumping her in the middle of a field without her phone or clothes. Basically friends betray her by beating her up, stripping her of her clothes and dumping her in the middle of a field without her phone or clothes. She won't tell anyone for fear of the mean girl damaging the reputation of her father Is that too much? much? --- Waffle, waffle, waffle <cite>LastTomorrow posted [p:970911793] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>Basically friends betray her by beating her up, stripping her of her clothes and dumping her in the middle of a field without her phone or clothes.Basically friends betray her by beating her up, stripping her of her clothes and dumping her in the middle of a field without her phone or clothes.She won't tell anyone for fear of the mean girl damaging the reputation of her fatherIs that too much?much?</quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
DrizztLink 01/17/23 5:25:59 PM #2:	LastTomorrow posted... Is that too much? Having it happen twice is a little mean. --- http://guidesmedia.ign.com/guides/9846/images/slowpoke.gif https://i.imgur.com/M8h2ATe.png https://i.imgur.com/6ezFwG1.png <cite>DrizztLink posted [p:970911804] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>LastTomorrow posted... </cite><quote>Is that too much?</quote>Having it happen twice is a little mean.</quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
GuerrillaSoldier 01/17/23 5:27:00 PM #3:	uh depending on the audience and genre that's either way too much or definitely not enough --- Disclaimer: There's a good chance the above post could be sarcasm. Die-hard Oakland A's fan --- Keep the A's in Oakland! <cite>GuerrillaSoldier posted [p:970911823] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>uh depending on the audience and genre that's either way too much or definitely not enough</quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
Gobstoppers12 01/17/23 5:27:20 PM #4:	Strange topic tbh --- I write Naruto Fanfiction. But I am definitely not a furry. <cite>Gobstoppers12 posted [p:970911830] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>Strange topic tbh</quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
Jiek_Fafn 01/17/23 5:28:08 PM #5:	DrizztLink posted... Having it happen twice is a little mean. lol --- I don't believe in belts. There should be no ranking system for toughness. <cite>Jiek_Fafn posted [p:970911843] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>DrizztLink posted... </cite><quote>Having it happen twice is a little mean.</quote>lol</quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
Tyranthraxus 01/17/23 5:28:50 PM #6:	What's the point of this? Like does she get revenge or something? --- It says right here in Matthew 16:4 "Jesus doth not need a giant Mecha." https://i.imgur.com/dQgC4kv.jpg <cite>Tyranthraxus posted [p:970911858] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>What's the point of this? Like does she get revenge or something?</quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
Crimsoness 01/17/23 5:28:55 PM #7:	Is this a porno? --- CrimsonAngel's alt <cite>Crimsoness posted [p:970911860] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>Is this a porno?</quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
coolguyjimmy 01/17/23 5:34:29 PM #8:	Does she then begin to Cultivate in defiance of the heavens, and swear revenge on them, all their clans, their sects, and all their families? Before wiping out entire cities for daring to do business with them for this Heaven-defying-vengeance? <cite>coolguyjimmy posted [p:970911964] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>Does she then begin to Cultivate in defiance of the heavens, and swear revenge on them, all their clans, their sects, and all their families? Before wiping out entire cities for daring to do business with them for this Heaven-defying-vengeance?</quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
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thronedfire2 01/17/23 5:35:42 PM #10:	GuerrillaSoldier posted... uh depending on the audience and genre that's either way too much or definitely not enough --- I could see you, but I couldn't hear you You were holding your hat in the breeze Turning away from me In this moment you were stolen... <cite>thronedfire2 posted [p:970911997] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>GuerrillaSoldier posted... </cite><quote>uh depending on the audience and genre that's either way too much or definitely not enough</quote></quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
refmon 01/17/23 5:38:59 PM #11:	DrizztLink posted... Having it happen twice is a little mean. --- If you read this signature, then that meant that I had control of what you read for 5 SECONDS!! <cite>refmon posted [p:970912058] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>DrizztLink posted... </cite><quote>Having it happen twice is a little mean.</quote></quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
bioshockjack 01/17/23 5:39:58 PM #12:	Well, the important thing is that your character actually develops from these things and her actions/thoughts reflect that. You gotta make sure that the audience cares about what's happening to the character or else it's just a bunch of bad things happening to someone you don't care for --- blah Switch FC: SW-5821-7513-8220 <cite>bioshockjack posted [p:970912076] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>Well, the important thing is that your character actually develops from these things and her actions/thoughts reflect that. You gotta make sure that the audience cares about what's happening to the character or else it's just a bunch of bad things happening to someone you don't care for </quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
ViewtifulJoe 01/17/23 5:40:04 PM #13:	Someone could tear a radiator off a wall and throw it like a shuriken at her. Or they could throw her phone like a shuriken. or a very sharp chocolate bar. --- Still waiting on that third threat <cite>ViewtifulJoe posted [p:970912080] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>Someone could tear a radiator off a wall and throw it like a shuriken at her.Or they could throw her phone like a shuriken.or a very sharp chocolate bar.</quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
kirbyy 01/17/23 6:42:30 PM #14:	DrizztLink posted... Having it happen twice is a little mean. Perfect --- Crayons taste like purple. <cite>kirbyy posted [p:970913419] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>DrizztLink posted... </cite><quote>Having it happen twice is a little mean.</quote>Perfect</quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
LastTomorrow 01/17/23 9:48:10 PM #15:	She does end up being a superhero. Behaves like a jerk sometimes. She has layers --- Waffle, waffle, waffle <cite>LastTomorrow posted [p:970917206] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>She does end up being a superhero. Behaves like a jerk sometimes. She has layers</quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
Smackems 01/17/23 10:19:48 PM #16:	LastTomorrow posted... She does end up being a superhero. Behaves like a jerk sometimes. She has layers Like a cake? She fat? --- Common sense says it may not taste good, but it'll make a turd. <cite>Smackems posted [p:970917740] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>LastTomorrow posted... </cite><quote>She does end up being a superhero. Behaves like a jerk sometimes. She has layers</quote>Like a cake?She fat?</quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
LeCh0nk 01/17/23 10:24:27 PM #17:	Smackems posted... Like a cake? She fat? Like an onion. She's an ogre. --- @('_')@ <cite>LeCh0nk posted [p:970917829] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>Smackems posted... </cite><quote>Like a cake?She fat?</quote>Like an onion. She's an ogre.</quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
Kim_Seong-a 01/17/23 10:27:10 PM #18:	Idk seems fine to me. Only a bit of shock value being that it's happening to a woman, but tons of male characters have much edgier/more humiliating stuff happen to them. As long as you avoid making it come off as fetishistic you should be fine. For a point of reference, the Netflix Grudge/Ju-On series has a ~~girl tricked by her other female classmates into coming to a haunted house, where their male friend rapes her as the girls watch/film.~~ You're not nearly at that level of edgy so... >_> --- Lusa Cfaad Taydr <cite>Kim_Seong-a posted [p:970917868] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>Idk seems fine to me. Only a bit of shock value being that it's happening to a woman, but tons of male characters have much edgier/more humiliating stuff happen to them.As long as you avoid making it come off as fetishistic you should be fine.For a point of reference, the Netflix Grudge/Ju-On series has a girl tricked by her other female classmates into coming to a haunted house, where their male friend rapes her as the girls watch/film.You're not nearly at that level of edgy so... >_></quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
ViewtifulJoe 01/17/23 10:38:53 PM #19:	What's her superpower? --- Still waiting on that third threat <cite>ViewtifulJoe posted [p:970918076] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>What's her superpower? </quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
LastTomorrow 01/17/23 10:46:44 PM #20:	Uhh... she wields ice --- Waffle, waffle, waffle <cite>LastTomorrow posted [p:970918200] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>Uhh... she wields ice</quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
ViewtifulJoe 01/17/23 10:50:16 PM #21:	Where does she find the ice to wield? Ice cube tray? Cooler? Nearby ice level? --- Still waiting on that third threat <cite>ViewtifulJoe posted [p:970918258] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>Where does she find the ice to wield? Ice cube tray? Cooler? Nearby ice level? </quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
LastTomorrow 01/17/23 11:21:56 PM #22:	An alien her the element crystal --- Waffle, waffle, waffle <cite>LastTomorrow posted [p:970918768] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>An alien her the element crystal</quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
LastTomorrow 01/18/23 12:27:50 PM #23:	Bump --- Waffle, waffle, waffle <cite>LastTomorrow posted [p:970927687] in Made a sto... [t:80315294]...</cite> <quote>Bump</quote> ... Copied to Clipboard!
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